Narrative Text - Last Hope
Last Hope
Raily's parents expected that their last daughter can be Civil Servant. Because, being Civil Servant considered elite in her village. She will also be respected by people around her dwelling. However Raily unwanted to being Civil Servant. She did not interested absolutely. She more interested with fine arts world. Because of that, she decided to choosen Fine Arts Major at university. Yet, her parents did not agree and doubted. "Are you sure with your choice? Withal, after graduating from the fine arts major, what will you be?" her father asked. Raily's sister not get a work yet, whereas she graduated from Department of Catering at Vocational School. That's because her sister was lazybone. Their parents' money was spent on cooking practice when their sister was in school. Father had suffered hypertension and symptom of stroke because of his sister behavior. Eventually, their father cannot work as former. Consequently, Raily's sister helped mother to sold side dishes at house.
"Mom, Dad... You must believe that I will succeed later. I will prove. I don't mess with my words and actions." Raily convinced herself and her parents that her choice was true. She tried to enrolled at state university at the town was closed to Phoebe Village. Fourthy minutes needed to got to university from Raily's house. She enrolled passed Test and sent several portofolio to fulfill the regulations. After the result of test came out, eventually Raily accepted at that university. That girl happy thoroughly. Her dream to entered Fine Arts Major was materialized. Moreover, entered state university meant not a lot money needed for tuition fees. "Lecture will start around 4 months again. It' still along time. It's better if I look for a job. Not bad for adding money to college later..." After she graduated from Senior High School, she waited incoming lecture with worked at a bakery. She became a salesperson. He realized even though he was still the responsibility of his parents. He must study independently
6 years later. She be able to has her own gallery. Furthermore she made a few handcrafts and it all selled with various price. She also opened course class for anyone who interested. Because of her persistence, conviction and consistency, she can succeed. Her parents who had hesitated previously, finally breathed a sigh of relief. Raily lifted the degree of her parents. Her parents pride to had a ddaughter like Raily. "I'm sorry, Mom and Dad doubted your decision."I'm also grateful to had parents like you both." Raily said while hugged her parents. Shortly after that his sister married a chef who was a school friend.
We must repaid the parents who have sacrificed everything for us. Being a proud child who can raise the degree of our parents. Everything we done will indeed not be the same as the kindness of our parents. At least didn't be an ungodly child. Done good things that made them happy even if it's a small thing.
(story written by Nadia Kusuma P.)
Your story is so good, linguistic and mechanic is correct, generic structure and grammar is correct.
BalasHapusYou have a little wrong sentence in a paragraph that have a dialogue about Raily Father's and Raily's mother's love. But, it's your story is very beautiful...
BalasHapusYou should add "there" before "lived".
BalasHapusHowever your story is very good.
Enjoy with your story 😍
BalasHapuswhen the sentence should include paragraphs, it is better to indented so that people can understand if it's a new paragraph but I like your story
BalasHapusOnly a little bit mistake in the paragraph, but the story is nice🤗
BalasHapusGood job nadia. It was a good story😊
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